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this isan interesting story. this can go much further. You did beautifully.

Liking Master again. I still want her to be extra special to Master. Is Bridget in on it out of jealousy or something? If it isan intentional breech, was there someone on the inside? Hmmmm.

Poor choice in recounting her history-- you just copied and pasted the first few paragraphs. Unless the introduction was copied and pasted from this section? We either should have been introduced to Kata as an already grown woman and then found out about her history at the same time as Axel and Isan did, or we should have gotten a slightly different account.
The fight scene didn't go long enough, and wasn't very detailed. I didn't feel panic for Kata. You need to be more descriptive and show the scene rather then tell it.
Her reasoning for stopping the lovefest wasn't very good either.
'Not that I wouldn't love to continue but the creature I just faced did rip a hole in my back, which would still be there if Howl didn't lick it, though it would be healing quickly, Howl's spit is amazing with healing power. On its own, that wound would be gone in a day, so my healing powers aren't so great. And I am immortal.'
The fact is, it was healed quickly by Howl's saliva. She didn't say, although my physical wounds are healed, I'm too exhausted or something of that nature. Then she says that her own healing powers aren't so great because it would take a day to heal rather than being instantaneous. And what does being immortal have to do with it? He already knows. Please, please, please get an editor.